Feedback:

— highlighting the language this group uses is a nice addition. are there other ways you can do this (for example, including other specific language from NHS materials)?

— i like the inclusion of the self-assessment questions. they turn attention back to the urgency of the emotional questions, while also showing how uncomfortable it can be to use "survey" language to assess emotional wellbeing.

— i thought the red text was your own personal experience and reflections, but this one doesn't really fit in that category. have i misunderstood? 

— this level of detail is also really useful for people who are unaware of the range of treatments used for depression and anxiety. 

— you've come a long way with this piece. it now has a nice balance of personal experience, institutional context, medical context, etc. using different type treatments to differentiate these 'voices' is really useful.

— the main question now is: what else are you going to do with your writing? what else can live around this piece? what else can you accomplish with the writing?

— if you look back at the learning outcomes, you'll see that you haven't done much to contextualize this piece within GCD. there is loose enquiry/position 'enacted' through this piece, but it's very implicit. can you help the reader to understand how your use of GCD has developed your own understanding? can you put your work in relationship to other practices, other ideas about GCD, etc.?